
Originally Posted by
Borror0
Additionally, the existence of two description in one [...] leads to ridiculously wordy description when you have items such as Dream Edge

Originally Posted by
Borror0
In Magic The Gathering, there are some
keywords used in place of the full explanation of the attribute or ability. Keywords have three functions: [...] they reduce the amount of words on a card for that ability, leaving room for more abilities which, in turn, expends the design space
I would like to put these two comments of mine together to make another point.
Here's the post-Update 5 Dream Edge (via MarcusCole):

A lot of these descriptions are extremely wordy. At this pace, you will end up with descriptions so long that they cannot fit into one screen as you slowly stack weapon enchantment over weapon enchantment. Not only are descriptions more stuff to read for, well, nothing but it could eventually limit design space. Those descriptions should be trimmed down to the essential.
For example, Dream Edge could read:
+5 Enhancement Bonus: Weapons with this quality
gain a +5 enhancement bonus to attack and damage.
Maiming: Whenever you score a critical hit with this
weapon, it deals 1d6 extra untyped damage and another
1d6 for each number the critical multiplier is above 2.
Aligned: This weapon can bypass good, evil, chaotic
and lawful DR.
Bodyfeeder: When this weapon scores a critical hit, you
gain 15 temporary HP for the next minute. In the event of
multiple critical hits, those hit points do not stack.
Chaotic Outsider Bane: Against chaotic outsiders, this
weapon deals an additional 2d6 damage and its enhancement
bonus to damage and attack increased by 2.
Suppressed Power: You sense this weapon has not unlocked
all of its secrets.
With the exception of Maiming, all of those descriptions are now shorter and easier to read.
Maiming could use some templating help, to better explain it, but it's better than the current one because it is both more accurate and less wordy. Unless I remember incorrectly, Maiming deals 4d6 for x5 multiplier and 5d6 for x6 multipliers but the description does not explain this. It stops at x4, which makes it inaccurate and misleading. It is important to find a good template for such effects because Maiming is not the only effect in that category. burst (like flaming burst) and blasts (like good last) also have similar descriptions.